Thesis Blog Post:

Identify the weak thesis statement:

1.)  B.

·      Sentence B relies on evidence and is arguable. It is short, yet straight to the point. It does not present a large summary.

2.)  B.

·      Sentence B is much more descriptive than sentence A. It gives the reader an idea of the main focus of the paper.

3.)  A.

·      Sentence A is much more original. It is definitely a statement directly from the author.

4.)  B.

·      Sentence B may raise argument and is very assertive. You are able to tell the statement relies on evidence.

5.)  B.

·      Sentence A is much more of a summary where as B is very descriptive but still remains right to the overall focus and point. It is both original and arguable.

My Thesis:

War is something that many people are unable to grasp and gain an understanding of; its effects are often overlooked. Sean Huze’s stance against the Iraqi war is broadcasted in his monologues thoroughly.

Why is this a good thesis?

I believe my thesis is arguable, some individuals may believe Huze is in support of the current war in Iraq. I am able to support my thesis using examples from the text and I feel as though it is original and stays right to the main point of my essay. 

            

Borch, Fred L. "The Forever War." The Journal of Military History 73.4 (2009): 1395-399. ProQuest Research Library. Web. 22 Oct. 2010.

                   This journal entrée talks about a book entitled “The Forever War” by Dexter Filkins. It is about the ongoing wars in Iraq and Afghanistan. This book is about the people, not only the soldiers, but the civilians as well. It is none the less about life in Iraq and Afghanistan through the eyes of an individual who experienced it first hand, both living and working in the fore front. Filkins did many interviews during his time in Iraq and he shares those in this book as well. This article and book are going to help me piece my paper together well. I am looking deeper into the civilian’s lives because I feel like that was a major focus in Huze’s play. He did not only emphasize on the soldiers experiences but also in the aftermath of war on the civilians in Iraq and the things they had to cope and deal with. I plan to dig deeper to understand Huze’s feelings of the troops being in Iraq according to his monologues as well.

           

Among The War: Seeing The Iraq War through Three Journalistic Vantage Points

Andrew M. Lindner

Social Problems
Vol. 56, No. 1 (Feb., 2009), pp. 21-48
(article consists of 28 pages)

Published by: University of California Press on behalf of the Society for the Study of Social Problems

Stable URL: http://www.jstor.org/stable/40264270

This article talks about the journalists who have been “embedded” in Iraq in order to report straight from the military units. It is about their failure to adequately report upon the effects of the war on Iraqi civilians. Instead the reporters spent much of their time over emphasizing the lives of the troops. This article has relevance for my paper because I believe I enjoyed Sean Huze’s monologues so much due to the fact that he not only shared how the troops were dealing but also how the civilians were living. He talked a lot about the loss of family members for many of them, the willingness to help the troops by giving food and water, and the welcoming arms they offered during war times. I plan to use this article to look deeper into the reasons behind such little emphasis on the civilians in this war, and why exactly that is being promoted.   

October 12, 2010

Dear Mrs. Cline,

I can’t even believe we are already half way through this semester; it’s gone by so fast. I am really enjoying English 102, more then any previous English course I have taken, in fact. Your style of online teaching is really easy to understand and I love that we are able to receive extra credit, that doesn’t happen often. I also love all the blogging we have done thus far. Writing a blog is something I had never become familiar with before this course, and I think it is a really good way to show our creative and individual sides.

My Biggest challenge in the class thus far has probably been the essay writing. I am familiar with writing essays but there is always improvement and growth to be made. I have never analyzed a piece of writing before, and although it seems like an easy thing to do, I have been assured it is not. Literary analysis is so different from any other writing that I have done before; you are required to look at every piece of literature that you read with a new deeper perspective. There is always a deeper message then the obvious one, and through literary analysis I have learned how to find that message, or even create it, whether it is right or wrong. I am not exactly sure what to expect when we research, analyze, and contrast a piece of work, but I am ready to find out what it’s all about! My biggest success thus far has probably been all of the growth I’ve seen in my writing. I have found a good outlet to make writing not seem as rough through my blog, and have enjoyed that very much. I have also been very motivated to do well in this course, and am seeing ample success so far, hoping to finish strong!

The readings in this class so far are unlike those in my English 101 course or any other course for that matter. They are relevant and current. They are relatable and give such deep messages. I never expected that I would read a story like “The Sandstorm” in a college course. Much to my surprise I LOVED it! With all of the harsh pictures it provides, I couldn’t have picked a better and more interesting read, to both write and analyze on. I am really enjoying the reading. Before this class I knew slim to none about Vietnam and in reading “The Things They Carried,” I have been exposed to some history. It feels good to gain so much knowledge out of an English course, something I have never done previously.

My Goals for the second half of this semester are simple. I hope to finish strong. I plan on doing nothing more then improving. My writing has grown immensely and can only grow more. I plan on expanding my pallet and trying new ways to interpret and analyze. I hope to accomplish an A for my final grade. I want to become more familiar with literary analysis because it is still such a foreign thing for me. I can’t wait to see what the remainder of the semester brings but I am ready to conquer it all. J

Sincerely,

Irma Jarovic 

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Summary Vs. Analysis

“On the Rainy River”

            This is a story that was never told before, until now. It was June of 1968, the 17^th to be exact, when Tim O’Brien’s world would change. He was a normal 21-year-old boy, working for a meat packing plant in Worthington, Minnesota at the time. Although he was politically naïve, fighting an American war in Vietnam seemed all-wrong to him. So when he received his draft notice he could not help but become scared, worried, uncertain, and any other feeling that might come across a young man who had never seen the harsh reality of war before. The first thought that came across to him was to run, run far, and fast, and never look back. This is precisely why he was ashamed to tell this story till now.

            Canada was his first thought. The border lay a few hundred miles north, and it would only be hours before he would reach his destination. He set off north, and just drove. O’Brien reached an old fishing lodge called the “Tip Top Lodge,” where his life changed for good. He would spend the next six days here with only one friend by his side, Elroy Berdahl, who was the proud owner of the lodge. Although Elroy didn’t say much, he is responsible for changing Tim’s life. He offered a helping hand, a warm meal, and a shoulder to lean on, knowing deep down the situation that Tim was facing was a difficult one to understand, or perhaps it was one he knew himself. Elroy asked no questions and expected no answers. He sheltered the young and scared O’Brien and they built a strong bond that Tim would never forget. O’Brien spent those six days hiking, playing scrabble, fishing, boating, and helping Elroy prepare the lodge for winter. After his stay at the lodge was through Tim would return home, and then to Vietnam, where he became a soldier. Tim states at the end of this story, “I survived, but it’s not a happy ending. I was a coward. I went to the war” (61).   

            O’Brien believes he is a coward for going to war. Isn’t fighting for our country something one should be proud of? In this case going against your morals becomes a question of whether or not your willing to fight for what you believe, or shy away and do what everyone else thinks is morally correct. O’Brien ran for those six days because he felt better then this war. He felt that “Certain blood was being shed for uncertain reasons” (40). Elroy becomes a significant part of the story because at no time did he question O’Brien’s morals or reasons for being at the lodge. Possibly because he is a symbol of a soldier who did what everyone else wanted and regretted it at one point in his life, knowing deep down what Tim was running from, hoping that he would be a man that would fight for what he believed, stepping outside of what everyone else expected. It could have been possible that if O’Brien would have not chosen to conform and go to war he would gain more respect and gratitude than taking the approach everyone wanted for him. The question is not what makes you a man but more of what makes you an individual in this story. As Tim O’Brien looks back he does feel as though he is a good man, I am sure of that, but does he view himself as being an individual who believes in himself enough to be willing to fight for his freedoms and judgments. We are all capable of doing what is expected of us, but are we all capable of doing the unexpected? I believe Elroy was hoping that Tim would do the unexpected and that is why he gave him so many opportunities to better throughout the story. So much of our day to day is based on conformations and pleasing others. We are judged to no end when we step outside of the box and do what we feel is right or what we choose to stand by, this is something that is so hard to grasp. Individuality is so much more respected. Doing the unexpected is so widely respected. The main message of this story is that no matter who the person encouraging you is, if there is something you stand against or do not believe in, do not, under any circumstances, conform to please them, because in the long run, even though you pleased them, you did not please yourself. Although O’Brien pleased everyone for his time served in Vietnam, he returned home and is still disappointed in his decision because he knows it was not one that stood by his morals and beliefs.

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Here I have inserted a link to Vietnam was stories. It was a pretty harsh and unreal war, and the stories are a good outlet to better understand these times and these men: http://www.3rdmarines.net/Vietnam_War_stories.htm

   

O'Brien, Tim. The Things They Carried. New York: Houghton Mifflin, 1990. Print. 

Tim O'Brien:
The Things They Carried

“A true was story is never moral. It does not instruct, nor encourage virtue, nor suggest models of proper human behavior, nor restrain men from doing the things men have always done. If a story seems moral, do not believe it. If at the end of a war story you feel uplifted, or if you feel that some small bit of rectitude has been salvaged from the larger waste, then you have been made the victim of a very old and terrible lie” (O’Brien 68-68).

            When reading Tim O’Brien’s The Things They Carried, I receive no feeling of uplift or rectitude, I feel no sense of sorrow or sadness, no happiness, and no anger, when reading The Things They Carried, I feel disbelief and bewilderment. The stories that Tim has presented us with take us into the utter reality of war; they offer an illustration we never thought we would get a glimpse of without being in attendance. The imagery and depiction in these stories is incredible. He has a way of making the reader feel involved and connected to the soldiers exposed in his writings.

            In the short story, On a Rainy River, I, as the reader, became closer in a sense to the utter reality of war and the feelings and emotions an individual faces when they determine they are approaching danger. In this story Lieutenant Jimmy Cross gives the reader a more extensive look into his own journey where previously he spend much of his time telling the stories of his fellow comrades and the things they were facing and taking part in. This story is about Lt. Cross before he set out to war. The things he did and the emotions he felt when he found out he was going to be drafted. He starts this story by mentioning that this was his first time presenting anyone with it, he felt embarrassment and shame at the time and didn’t have the courage to share these events until now. This shows the reader a sense of how important these episodes were to the writer, and how close to the heart he held them. It makes me realize how hard it must be to share many of the events that happened while at war or in the procedures of it.

            “Stories are for joining the past to the future. Stories are for those late hours in the night when you can’t remember how you got from where you were to where you are now.  Stories are for eternity, when memory is erased, when there is nothing to remember except the story” (O’Brien 38). These stories told by O’Brien are questionable. But that disbelief is what makes them so admirable, and so true. When I read How to Tell a True War Story I found myself examining if what I read was the same as what was written. These aspects are what make the stories war stories. I think Tim O’Brien has an indescribable way of sharing his experiences and the experiences of fellow soldiers. He puts into perspective the challenges that so many men and women face everyday and the absurd things they witness. I am grateful to gain such a deep mental vision through these readings. 

   

O'Brien, Tim. The Things They Carried. New York: Houghton Mifflin, 1990. Print.

Sean Huze

"The Sandstorm"

            “War stories. Everyone that’s actually been over there has ‘em. See, truth be told, war hasn’t changed much over the years.” Sean Huze relays the war stories of ten marines who spent their time in Iraq through his play “The Sandstorm”. This play is a true reflection of the men and women fighting daily for our freedom and safety and the things they witness in their days overseas. The harsh reality of things these individuals observe on the daily is completely out of our perspective and understanding. The stories they share are unbearable and disturbing. They give the reader a real glimpse into the life of being a soldier, something none of us are able to fathom.

            We are so quick to place judgment and blame on the people of Iraq for the harsh reality that so many of our American men and women are risking their lives due to the stupidity of another individual, and the actions that have been made against our country. I found one act in this play to be exceptionally touching.  “Everyone from the President down to some boot private wants to pass the burden of the horrors we were onto the Iraqis.” Doc Matthews share one horror he experienced while overseas. He recalls, “We had come across a burned out 4 door compact. Its wheels had melted and it was still smoking. We saw 3 burned corpses in the car and he was lying next to it. I don’t know how the hell he survived but he did. His wife and two children were a different story.” He continues reliving that moment, “I could smell their still smoldering flesh and I just broke down. I couldn’t stop crying and I hugged this man whose family had just been massacred by us, by Marines. I’m sorry, I’m so sorry.” The Man looked up at me, “ Not your fault. I blame Saddam. You, you Americans are a gift from Allah. You are here to deliver us from Saddam. I only wish I could have gotten my family out sooner.” This scene was stood out incredibly to me because it is something some of our American civilians do not understand. It is an important reality we may not otherwise grasp. The reality that not every person in Iraq means harm, it is not the civilians whom are to blame, but instead the piece of shit that started this war. The people of Iraq are grateful for our American troops, as are we, and show them the respect they deserve.

            The utter reality of emotional exhaustion that our soldiers endure can never really be understood through these stories but Sean Huze has a way of relaying their pain in a manner that the reader can truly feel for and perceive. From their harsh conditions, the heat and dehydration, to the devastating images they are subject to daily. This play is not only scrutinizing but an authentic truth of the lives these people live and the challenges they face while overseas. Many of us experience culture shock when moving to a new place or being in an unfamiliar situation. The amount of shock and disbelief these soldiers are facing I cannot imagine and I give them the upmost respect for their courage and strength. God Bless. 

Here I have inserted a link to more stories of those soldiers we have fighting in Iraq, and the things they have witnessed while overseas: 

http://www.stevepavlina.com/blog/2007/07/stories-from-soldiers-in-iraq/ 

Responding to a Poem:

            We are born with dreams in our hearts, looking for better days ahead (Baca 1). This line came from the poem Immigrants in Our Own Land. This poem has a personal effect on me because I believe I am able to relate, in all honesty I think all of us can relate. We have all come from somewhere, and almost every one of us is an immigrant to the land we now occupy. Jimmy Santiago Baca, the author of this particular poem speaks deeply. You are able to gain a real sense of understanding. The message he is trying to convey is one he feels deeply about. It brings upon a feeling of resentment for me. In the beginning of the poem the author speaks about immigrants all wanting a new life. He talks about the way they are treated, and the things they are taught to believe about this new life they are hoping for. One line stands out to me, “The old men who have lived here stare at us, from deep disturbed eyes, sulking, retreated (Baca, 1).” This reminds me much of what is going on in Arizona currently. We are shipping many immigrants back to Mexico daily. At one point in time, we were new residents to a foreign place, and the looks we received were similar to those stated in this poem. Now the tables have turned and we are the men giving disturbed looks and feeling retreated. This poem brings a new light to a situation that we otherwise might not consider. The life that this particular author lived was one of many hardships, and due to that I believe we are able to feel the voice in his writing, and really gain an understanding of where he is coming from. Jimmy Baca was sent to an orphanage at a young age, he later spent 5 years in a high security prison, and this in fact was where he began producing his poetry. I believe Baca relives his life in a sense through this poem. He is telling the reader about the second chance he was given at creating a better life for himself. This poem is a great example of poetry of witness. I have inserted a link to a website where you are able to read the entire biography on this poet: http://www.jimmysantiagobaca.com/biography.html

            Many of us loose the beauty in our own lives, and oftentimes it is something that we are unable to retrieve. In the poem The Woman Hanging from the Thirteenth Floor Window we are able to relate to the way this stranger feels. This poem sends a strong message, and relays the basic idea the writer is trying to get across through a harsh point of view. Sometimes we loose sight of our lives and the things that once made us happy. I can relate to this poem because I am a victim of loosing sight of the things that once made me happy. Sometimes this happens due to a sudden change is schedule, other times it can be a relationship that changes our lives, I know in many cases you get very wrapped up in your partner and loose sight of yourself when you are in a deep emotionally draining relationship. We have the opportunity to pick up ourselves and regain self worth, or continue to be unhappy. That is the message I received at the end of this poem. The woman hangs from the 13^th floor window crying for the lost beauty in her own life. She sees the sun falling over the grey plane of Chicago. She thinks she remembers listening to her own life break loose, as she falls from the 13^th floor window on the east side of Chicago, or as she climbs back up to claim herself again (Harjo 2). These poems I could relate most to and found the most meaning in. I really enjoy reading poetry of witness. Here is a link where you are able to learn a little more about this poet: http://project1.caryacademy.org/echoes/poet_joy_harjo/Defaultharjo.htm